Thats good i liek it xx

The flow is a little rocky in places, maybe its just me but i did like the poem. I seem to be a little crytical of things at the moment, but i did like it.
love tara-Kay
x

Add better punctuation , to make it sound the way it should be read , and instead of four lines ,
Drifting far away the mind does wonder.
Lost in its thoughts and colorful dreams.
Put it all together . It's easier to read . You can add bigger vocabulary and elaborate some more and you'll create a better picture of what you want to explain , or create a flow to it .

What a familiar feeling to many. Overall, this is a pretty good piece. The idea behind it is solid, but I feel as though you could elaborate more, right now it seems a little hackneyed, but I feel it going in a good direction. It also seems a little impersonal; I would perhaps just go in and lengthen it a bit more. What you have written so far is good, I feel your contemplation and helplessness, I would just take it one step further.

A few grammatical things:

"That its dreams are to far away to grasp."
`to` should be `too`

"It's just to far away."
again `to` should be `too`

"It's dreams will never come true. "
`it's` should be the possessive `its`

Good work (: You've got the framework
for a wonderful piece here, keep writing
down the bones, take care,

`Nova

Hey, it's me again. the flow isn't that great but it's good. Keep it up. I'll read more of your stuff soon. Promise.

"Dreams are to far away to grasp"
*too far away to grasp

I really like the meaning of this poem, not entirely sure why. I know a lot of people can relate to this, which makes it a great piece.
Just the whole meaning, and how you explained it was wonderful. Although I wasn't feeling the "sad" part of it, just a pang, perhaps.

Oh the "It's" in the beginning of the last line should be "Its".

Great work, 5/5

jess ~

I liked this. It was good. It had a lot of emotions and feelings, and you let them out very well. Great job. 5/5

Drifting far away
the mind does wonder.
Lost in its thoughts and dreams.

It searches but it cannot find what it searches for.
The pain of failure cuts deep
with this sad realization.

5/5 on this part , it paints a beautiful picture . The rest though needs some work . Leave off there , don't elaborate . Kind of work in another idea . 4/5 overall .

I liked it a lot, although it did lack on emotion a little bit. but, who am i to talk, your poems are way better than mine anyway.
but yeah, just sometimes it helps to have someone else read your work because they can be completely open minded about it.
it is very good though.

This was a good poem, but I've gotta say that the structure of it isn't very good. I enjoyed reading it though and I certainly got the meaning of it. The only problem is the structure. It's good and since I did like it, I'll give it a 5/5. Good job!!

.:CiiNDY:.

Very powerful... keep it up hun