UGH! finish it! i wanna read the rest. good job though... there was just something about it. maybe because she was so innocent. i dont kow but it made me wanna read more.

Amazing already, cant wait for part 2, really well done!

Awsome cant wait for the rest

It was good. I liked it. I liked that it showed how innocent u were and she was more experienced in yet u didn't resist. That u still wanted more. I liked it. What I would suggest would be that u work on ur flow and put it in2 stanza's. That's the only thing. But other than that it was very good

That was great. I loved the contrast between innocence and desire.

Damn thats really good i love how u just went for it not havin that much experience thats how it was for me wen it happened to me for the first time