HMMMMMMM
it could use some work!
the message was good, but it was really short.
you have a great personality..just let it show in your poetry!
and dont try to hard..writing, to me, is supposed to be fun!
dont make it a job!
Put your raw, intimate emotions down on paper and let it flow, girl!
<3

Thats good hun xx

That was great, really deep

Thanks Alot I am new here..