Comments : Looking in my life

  • 15 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Very strongly written xxx

  • 15 years ago

    by Dian PH

    Its nice but...

    It's the growing pain of helplessness that has had me conquered in this empty room
    It's the creeping silence that always makes my troubles much more vivid than life intended
    It's the lies my heart contains that makes my heart grow bitter
    it's what i have thrown away in the past that will define me
    But not my soul because the lord defines that.

    *kindly move it like this*

    It's the growing pain
    of helplessness
    that has had me conquered
    in this empty room

    It's the creeping silence
    that always makes my troubles
    much more vivid than life intended

    It's the lies
    my heart contains
    that makes my heart grow bitter

    It's what i have thrown away
    in the past that will define me

    But
    not my soul
    because
    the lord defines that.

    *maybe this one make it looks better than before. i like the lines you use to it. just bulit it right. keep the good work.*

    --dian

  • 15 years ago

    by hopefulsmile

    Good poem , i like it :)