Comments : Old Green Vein Dream [Are you having too much sugar]

  • 12 years ago

    by Im not broken anymore

    I love it very nicely done... And i hate when people do this but i think if you take out old at the end it will sound better... But its your poem its amazing good job 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Ingrid de Klerck


    soem people do this, I know and you have made a good poem about it. I hope it's not about you, but I don't think it is:)


    5/5 Ingrid

  • 12 years ago

    by Robie Lincer

    To me this is not only a 6 min poem, but an excellent poem...

    i love how you rhymed the last word of each line.

    The flow of the poem, makes a reader to keep on reading, the way you used your words was really good...

    and no one would have expected it was a bad old dream in the end...

    very well written...
    keep it up always.

  • 12 years ago

    by Andrew

    This is short but very nice, i really like the title, well thought of. Good work keep it up

  • 12 years ago

    by Gasttlee

    For some reason I really liked this. I can't quite put my finger on i, but there's a unique aura I sense, partially because of the imagery.