I like the first and second stanza.

"Would I.... No, should I even cry for you.
You, who would let me die at any moment?

Would you.... No, should you ever fall for me.
Me, who wanted to give you eternity?"

really good=D keep writing! 5/5

Thise are my fav lines
'"Would I.... No, should I even cry for you.
You, who would let me die at any moment?

Would you.... No, should you ever fall for me.
Me, who wanted to give you eternity?"

That is so awsomely written. Nice job!!

XxXKristie MarieXxX