Amazing job jesse...i'll leave you a real comment later..i'm too tired right now. sorry. but amazing job.

Honestly, an amazing poem. it's very bittersweet, which doesn't surprise me. :P

I would write a poem
Seas and oceans long
If I really thought
It would make me belong

^ we all belong in some way or another. the ocean saves no one. neither do poems...you belong jesse...maybe not where you want..but you belong.
When the fairy tale's gone
Cause I don't believe
Broken hearts not what I want
A hug is what I need

^ funny how we never get what we need...never get what we want. i'm sorry, jesse.

Need a birds-eye-view
But I'm down below
I hold on to your hand
Wait for you to let go

^ see through her eyes if you want a bird's eye view. maybe you'll see yourself if you look through those eyes...

If I could belong
Or if you belonged with me
Those thoughts are long lost
They got lost at sea

^ :S i'm getting seasick. jk jk. very nice stanza..

If it could change things
I'd write it all down
Drown myself in my sea of poems
Get lost just to get found

^ this last line is definitely one of the best lines i've heard in a long time..

Last shred of hope
Your hand in mine
Feel like I'm flying
Fingers intertwined

^ idk. maybe you listened to me when i said there was hope. maybe you pulled it out of your own head...either way, a beautiful finish to a beautiful poem.

5/5

~Get lost just to get found~
i think every1 does that. my favorite line out of the whole poem! but i also luv the quote at the bottem, it's 1 that i always go by, just like "u'll never know untill u try" their a little over used but still very true. well, great poem, job well done. the flow was beautiful and it kept me reading. 5/5
xoxo
~me~