You are very good at painting a scenery...for a moment...I was with you...in mafia.. Great job!! :) Marvellous..

Not one of your best poems, but I can see the potential here. The type of 'alright' that you should probably use is 'all right' it just fits better. I like the refrains though!
Be careful of your rhyming-it should sound natural, not forced.
All in all an all right job!

Superb......when is the next colab?????