I don't know how to describe this poem.. Well, I got scared from
"if you go down you can never come back,
because then you'll be a part of our little family."

I definetely would skip going down there. :P Specially if I had to scrub the carpet clean for blood..

Well, you created a nice little story. Good job.. And the sage goes now... ;)

Wow! Another good addition to your story line..I really enjoyed this poem, and I have no suggestions on how to make it better -I think it's just fine the way it is--I love your use of refrains--you always choose the perfect lines to say. Good job!