Comments : Right under your arms.

  • 16 years ago

    by KJ

    Very good write
    I really liked the fact the way you didnt use rhyme in this poem, but at the same time you used terrific voice and perfect use of vocabulary. The only thing that I would change, if anything:

    "And those rainy days turn into sunny,"
    ^^I think you should edit it into saying:
    "And those rainy days turn sunny"
    Sunny is an adj, so you really dont need the "into". just a suggestion tho =)

    Overall, beautifully written
    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by WrittenInTheStars

    This poem is awesome. I thought it flowed well and came from the heart. I just saw a few lines that need a little fixing up, but nothing dramatic.. Great job.

  • 16 years ago

    by Nic

    I loved it
    it is awsome really
    keep writing i cant wait to read more

  • 16 years ago

    by robin milford

    Good poem I liked it