Wow i like this one..

Full of emotion...wonderful! it touched my heart...:)

-thanks for the comment!!!-

--**Skye~

Wow I love it! very touching.:::::))))

Very well written Awesome Job!

Good one , i can see you have strogn feelign for you mother , it touch good ,
keep up !!

It's sad. Very sad and it reminds me of the wish that had when I was that girl's age. But I came to learn that "If wishes were wings pigs would fly and maybe fish and sheep too." It makes my heart ache. Nice job.

Thats good..
i rly like it

So touching piece, and also the theme. Aww, the little girl just wanting to be loved by her mum, makes me feel so sorry for her. Sorry, if it's from your life.
Whole poem had so smooth flow and really overall amazing read.

5/5 Keep writing! :)

That reminds me how much i truely luv my mummy

Gosh, so freaking sad, because we all no that this dream will NEVER be, so sad, i really really really liked this poem
5/5

Adorable poem. short && sweet. i liked it. keep writing 5/5

Excellent job. everyone needs there parents no matter how old they get. there someone to lean back on 5/5

So innocent....so sweet. i love how you've described this feelin as nothing more than a dream. it seems to me that a child would have dreams like this if they have no parents. of one day being loved as so many others are. you've really touched my heart. keep up the good work
~*~Amber~*~
p.s. thanks for the comment on mine. if i never commented back then it was due to internet problems because we moved. if i did then i just added a new comment lol BYE!!! :D

Very nice and smooth, loved it.

5\5

Nice poem short and smooth and yet a fine line between sad and sweet great job 5/5

I like this... it shows how much you care about your mummy ...touching

Hi nice flow, the line a 'little girl being loved by her mummy all day through', this adds a touch some might say.

Hi Saffie great poem.

Firstly the repetition of the word little and mummy- make the whole poem so innocent from start to finishes, it give syou deep sorrow, if you think if you took these words out it wouldn't have such a big reaction on you. they help with the imagery, as you can see the little girl and her mom, a really tiny girl about 5. and it makes you really upset to think of her dreaming about having her mummy tonight even though its just a dream.

its in our human nature to wish for things that we will never have, and its something that as we grow we will realise, that not every wish can come true, this was one that couldn't. and it seems so simple to people to have a mum. :[ but its not always the case.

anyway the shortness and the four line stanza, with a simple rhyme scheme works for this poem rather well. the vocabulary was also simple and easily to understand which gives it a big thumbs up for me :]

amy keep it up x

Nice poem! i like the 2nd stanza the most! Good work:)