Thats really powerful work, keep it going and well done x

This is a really disturbing poem, but interesting - he doesnt even think enough of himself or the world to write a letter/note or whatever. theres this book - 13 reasons why - about a girl who leaves behind tapes of why she killed herself, and all 13 people who led to her life being ruined had to listen to them . . .anyway this reminds me of that, but this is way sadder. the only thing is that some of it is awkward like "The kid disappointed in life, with a lot of fear, about to give up
He wasn't expecting for anyone, not even himself"
did you mean "the kid WAS disappointed in life, full of fear, about to give up,
He wasnt expecting ?? for anyone, not even himself"
not sure what you wanted to say where i put the ??'s, obviously. thats slightly less awkward - if the wordings were changed it would really be emotional and touching, through and through.
<3 claire

"The kid disappointed in life"
I didn't meant "the kid WAS disappointed in life" if i wrote was it would end the kid's disappointment... even when he died he continued disappointed. If you actually read it and focus on it you'll understand. Also,
"He wasnt expecting for anyone, not even himself" He wanted to die, that is obvious; like I wrote "No one would notice, no one would give a care.." He didn't expect for anyone to go and stop him from committing suicide. He didn't expect for him to regret killing himself. Death was clearly in his fate.