Comments : Why Didn't You?

  • 16 years ago

    by Priscilla

    Sad yet good poem
    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Lisa

    That's sad...but I like the poem.

  • 16 years ago

    by Cara

    Omg. i love it. im speechless. its brilliant.
    xx

  • 16 years ago

    by Lu

    Why didn;t you run
    When you had the chance?
    Instead of returning every day
    Why didn't you quit that hurting romance?
    ^^^
    Such a very sad opening stanza. When caught in the web of love our eyes are so blinded by times and our lips so closed.

    Why didn't you strike him back
    When he hit you so hard you couldn't even scream?
    Didn't you suffer enough when he told you he didn't love you
    Realising that that life was not your dream?
    ^^^
    Such a tragic way to live and you have expressed the suffering (emotionally and physically) that abused victims go through.
    4th line realising -----> realizing

    Why didn't you show me your bruises
    When you had the opportunity?
    You're body covered with bandaids
    How didn't I see?
    ^^^
    We sometimes don't see because the victim hides it so well ... touching stanza
    3rd line You're ----> Your

    Why didn't you stop him from winning
    When he hurt then apologised?
    The scenes in your mind
    He replayed, repeated and made you memorise?
    ^^^
    How sometimes the victim becomes to think it is all their fault and the other will change. Very sad, yet true stanza.

    2nd line apologised ----> apologized
    4th line ----> memorise ----> memorize

    Why didn't you answer
    When I called your phone that night?
    Seeing your beaten body lifeless
    Did you really have any chance of putting up a fight?
    ^^^
    What a heart wrenching ending you've penned here.
    A very sad read, well done
    Luanne

  • 16 years ago

    by Blissful

    Wow whatta sad story and what hurts the most that this happens to defensless girls everyday. The way you used questions was effective in creating your mood and getting your message across flawlessly. The emotions were deep and real which showed what pain you felt while writing this. The flow was flawless and the poem as a whole was filled with meaning. Well done *5/5*

  • 16 years ago

    by RainbowSlider

    This poem touched me deeply. Sometimes we can be too proud to ask for help and we victimize ourself almost as bad as the abuser did by not reaching out for help. Since we don't let another know the victimization is like a perfect crime because not even we are totally aware of its full potential.