I like the rythim to it. "I witness it
I see it
I inhale it
The pain echos
Through my very soul
Ripping it
Tearing it
Shreding it" that has a powerful message in it. and also "Love agianst your cheek
Across your lips
Down your neck
Bleeding into your soul" i can just feel it, now when i can feel your poem, that means your doin a good job. God bless you.

-michael