Comments : Can you ??

  • 15 years ago

    by abullettotheheart

    Still he yets to hear you
    even when your screaming his name in the dead of night
    you wake up crying because after all it was just a dream
    thats me as well and i am so sorry if your going through even half of what im going through no it sdoesnt hurt it stings one bit at a time intel it eats you alive
    hi im Brandi nice to meet you

  • 15 years ago

    by End Of Eternity

    Dreams do come true, great write

    all the best and take care

  • 15 years ago

    by Dark Savior

    You're poem is up and down. I think that you really have a lot of emotion behind this poem. There is a great deal of emotion in each and every word.

    This is a really great poem. I just feel that the syllables are up and down, you have a huge line coupled with a small line. I know that you do it as a release, just a little tidbit of information. Then you go from two lines to four, then two, then one. Just a little bit of 411 to help you improve.

    Awesome poem, I gave it a five, because it mirrors a lot of our thoughts.

  • 14 years ago

    by mia

    Thank you Brandi =) ,Dark savior and End of Eternity =)) thnx ;)

  • 13 years ago

    by Sarah

    Loveee it gurl! =)