*your in the last line should be you're

Wow, Mel...
Impressive. I can't find better word to express what I feel about this poem. I simply loved every stanza. I see that you changed writing style a bit and that worked greatly for me. The topic is so inspiring and I like the fact that this piece can be interpreted on many different ways.

- Well,
darkness never;
felt so inspiring.-
^^
Fantastic beginning. This pulled me straight into this piece and made me want to read more. Also, I can deeply relate to these lines because I felt like that many times when it comes to writing.

- Sympathy to your lips of wax,
Caution dazzles within eyes,
Muttering metaphors to twilight,
Tasting a hollow imagination.-
^^^
Wow... breathtaking. The imagery portrayed within this stanza is dark and artistic, so vivid. I love it. Every line is small work of art.

- Absorbing creativity to glitter,
Drifting tranced to beating door,
Inadequate to depart once again,
Oh contemptible translucent muse. -
^^^
Beautifully written. The topic evolves within this stanza and every word seem perfectly picked.

- Blaze attire to particles of dust,
Clip cypress crown to never vanish,
Chant inspiration to rushing ears,
Grounded mutilated upon my shoulder.-
^^^
So vivid. Another amazing stanza. Your descriptions are truly powerful and mind-blowing here.

The repetition at the end is effective and the added line summed up whole poem excellently.
This poem is certainly going to my favs.

Overall, this is an amazing read, and it seem flawless to me from the first to the last line. There are so many emotions and remarkable descriptions within every stanza and I feel like this poem posses a world of its own that simply captivated me.

Keep writing, you obviously have so much deep poetic beauty to share.

Title is brilliant, so creative and eye-catching.
First of all I must tell you that you on incredible way intertwined emotions with pictures in each part of this piece.

-Well,
darkness never;
felt so inspiring.-

^I was honestly captivated with this start, it is so powerful, you mixed emotion and image in so effective lines, you truly grabbed my attention.

-Sympathy to your lips of wax,
Caution dazzles within eyes,
Muttering metaphors to twilight,
Tasting a hollow imagination.-

^Now, how beautiful those lines are? I was literally without words when I read them, I must read them once more just to take one more look on their brilliant essence. So deep and your word choice is great. Pure poetic beauty, very unique and so vivid description, Mel you took my breath with this mesmerizing stanza.

- Absorbing creativity to glitter,
Drifting tranced to beating door,
Inadequate to depart once again,
Oh contemptible translucent muse. -

^I like your detail writing here, you managed to portray very clearly this complex lines, you created excellent rhythm too.

-Blaze attire to particles of dust,
Clip cypress crown to never vanish,
Chant inspiration to rushing ears,
Grounded mutilated upon my shoulder.-

^Simply fantastic, I have my own interpretation of deep meaning of this stanza, you amazed me with originality of words and with extreme way on which you combined them...

-Oh
how,
darkness never;
felt so inspiring
-Muse your not going anywhere. -

^Wow, wow, you honestly left me with this ending, such powerful repetition and and simply wow, fascinating ending stanza, my favorite one.

Overall you stunned me with this piece, I am so glad that I read it, and you actually inspired me a lot, your words truly remember me sometimes why I love writing and poetry so much, and this was that type of your breath-taking work.

I can see how this is dark poetry. It is dark, but not in the way people tend to perceive dark poetry. It doesn't seem to be about death or that, but more of and inspirational piece. That would be what a muse is, inspiration. This poem is unique. Expecially the title. I LOVE the title. Very creative.

FIRST AND LAST STANZA'S:

"Well,
darkness never;
felt so inspiring."

"Oh
how,
darkness never;
felt so inspiring
-Muse your not going anywhere."

I don't like the format of them. I think the semi-colons are completely unneeded and threw me off. Also, in the first one, I think you can do without the word "well".
Something like
"Darkness never felt so inspiring"
A line like that draws me in, because I question myself, wondering how the heck can darkness be inspiring? But it can, which is shown in this poem.

SECOND STANZA:

"Sympathy to you're lips of wax,
Caution dazzles within eyes,
[^^This second line amazes me. It gives me a visual of someone with caution, and fear in their eyes.]

Muttering metaphors to twilight,
Tasting a hollow imagination."
The last line really wow-ed me. Making me think, "Hollow imagination, is that even possible?" Making me think and ponder shows extreme talent.]

THIRD STANZA:

Blaze attire to particles of dust,
Clip cypress crown to never vanish,
Chant inspiration to rushing ears,
Grounded mutilated upon my shoulder.
[^^ The third line in this is the best. That is what a "muse" does, it whispers inspiration into the ears of others. The fact that you know that, and made it into a poem, shows creativity.]

LAST LINE:

"-Muse your not going anywhere."
[^^ It should be "you're" not "your". Also, I think you should add a comma after "Muse", it adds the pause effect and makes it more dramatic.
This line also represents that you like the muse, the dark inspiration]

A good read, I enjoyed it.
5/5
Take care and keep writing.
~Lace

I LOVED the imagery
"Lips of wax" was my favorite line
its amazing how darkness and the absense of...well...nething is so inspiring.
great work! keep it up

5/5

Oh my you never cease to amaze me with the images you created with your words.

Well,
darkness never;
felt so inspiring.
^ I loved how this just captured my attention from the beginning and had me wanting to read more. One would not think there is inspiration in darkness but it seems as if youve found it.

Sympathy to your lips of wax,
Caution dazzles within eyes,
Muttering metaphors to twilight,
Tasting a hollow imagination.
^The way you placed your words in this stanza blew me away because it was unique and filled with imagery. I also loved how this stanza made me feel as if surreal.

Absorbing creativity to glitter,
Drifting tranced to beating door,
Inadequate to depart once again,
Oh contemptible translucent muse.
^Another beautiful stanza where your words just shined like the sun after a cloudy day. Very refreshing.

Blaze attire to particles of dust,
Clip cypress crown to never vanish,
Chant inspiration to rushing ears,
Grounded mutilated upon my shoulder.
^Wow I love how dark and haunting it was .. eery yet beautiful sending chills up and down my back. Maybe my fave stanza so far.

AMAZING ENDING. It tied everything in together so nicely and was a great way to complete your piece. Nice write as always my dear *5/5*

Was there a rhyme scheme? Anyways nice piece of work! stunning! I like the introduction! and conclusion! keep it up!

Well,
darkness never;
felt so inspiring

Awesome opening to a poem. Very interesting.

Sympathy to your lips of wax,
Caution dazzles within eyes,
Muttering metaphors to twilight,
Tasting a hollow imagination.

You use very nice vocab. And I love that in poetry. It makes the reader really think about the poem.

Absorbing creativity to glitter,
Drifting tranced to beating door,
Inadequate to depart once again,
Oh contemptible translucent muse.

Again, Its wonderful. I have nothing bad to say....

I don't think there's anything else bad I can say about the poem either.. I've read it over a few times, And there is not one thing I would change and alter.

Truely an amazing piece, Very good talent. Keep on writing!

Well,
darkness never;
felt so inspiring

Awesome opening to a poem. Very interesting.

Sympathy to your lips of wax,
Caution dazzles within eyes,
Muttering metaphors to twilight,
Tasting a hollow imagination.

You use very nice vocab. And I love that in poetry. It makes the reader really think about the poem.

Absorbing creativity to glitter,
Drifting tranced to beating door,
Inadequate to depart once again,
Oh contemptible translucent muse.

Again, Its wonderful. I have nothing bad to say....

I don't think there's anything else bad I can say about the poem either.. I've read it over a few times, And there is not one thing I would change and alter.

Truely an amazing piece, Very good talent. Keep on writing!

Alright, I'll complain right from the beginning I suppose. No, the only thing I dislike is the layout of the poem. I dont like choppy lines, I guess. I'm kind of a neat guy. Lol.

The entire poem in itself was a good message. You capture the attention from the beginning by somehow beginning to state a story and then leaving the reader to want much more by the end.

You vocabulary was superb in this, it was quite detailed and well put together. My favorite lines were "Sympathy to your lips of wax,
Caution dazzles within eyes,"

One thing I do hate those is a mix of too many descriptive words all together. It throws off the entire poem to me and it just seems like my brain is trying to visualize way too much out of the poem and it doesnt work out. There were only a few occurances of that in this piece of poetry for me, so you made it work.

I really enjoyed reading this. A good descriptive poem is needed here and there, I'd say. Very nicely done. (:

Love love love this.

Well,
darkness never;
felt so inspiring.

^^I like how this started out, it makes me think you've found something that was semi-unexpected, which made me want to continue reading. It really drew me in...

Sympathy to your lips of wax,
Caution dazzles within eyes,
Muttering metaphors to twilight,
Tasting a hollow imagination.

^^"Caution dazzles within eyes," really jumped out at me, it's a very creative line. That and the idea of how expressive eyes can be is such an interesting one, to think that looks can express mere thoughts, is pretty cool. I also like the imagery you express here, especially in "Tasting a hollow imagination", the concept of it is extremely interesting as well as vivid.

Absorbing creativity to glitter,
Drifting tranced to beating door,
Inadequate to depart once again,
Oh contemptible translucent muse.

^^ Hmm a little critique: "Drifting tranced to beating door" sounds a bit off to me. (I could really be reading it wrong though. Keep that in mind for I often do so). Anyway, I think it would make more sense if you said 'trance' instead of 'tranced', because tranced seems to add past tense to this stanza when the way it's written doesn't imply past tense. Just a random thought. :)

Blaze attire to particles of dust,
Clip cypress crown to never vanish,
Chant inspiration to rushing ears,
Grounded mutilated upon my shoulder.

^^I love this stanza, it's my favorite. An image comes to mind that I can't quite describe, so I won't, but I feel a lot of depth in it.

Oh
how,
darkness never;
felt so inspiring
-Muse, you're not going anywhere.

^^ I like the ending and how you bring back thoughts from the beginning. It gives me a sense of completion, not just in the poem but in what could have been going through your mind as you were writing.

I also really admire the form and how you use capitalization and punctuation. (I know that's nerdy to say, but it stood out in a good way to me). Oh and the wordplay in the title is awesome! It's the main reason I clicked on the poem, which is overall brilliant. :)