Hey I love the way you used the material objects metaphor as a comparisons to how you felt and them encorporated it into a poem! That was so sweet and the poem is very cute i've added it to my favorties! 5/5 No negs. :)

Well written piece, powerful from the beginning to the end. I think that you manged to create very vivid imagery in every stanza. Also, the flow of the whole piece is flawless. The repetition of some words threw me off a bit but I liked this piece despite that. When I began reading I thought it would become too cliche but you pulled it off nicely. You greatly expressed emotion that a lot of people can relate to.

Which twists my heart into discomfort.
`I think it would sound better as : "Which twists my heart with discomfort." But that's just a suggestion and my opinion -- I don't know how it sounds in your eyes.

I am your blankets when you're cold,
`blanket ... to me would sound better rather than have it plural. Again, just my opinion .

The emotional pain that is expressed is so strong, so beautiful, so powerful -- it's clear, and captivating. At first, I was like, Oh jeez. This is gonna be another overrused poem that I read so often -- but you really proved me wrong. This was better than your others that I read, definitely. The metaphors, I adored. I was taken back to an old situation -- and I could feel emotions playing tug-o-war. And the way you ended it was just gorgeous. Well done.

--..MiNDYY