Aww!! very sweet!.. il ove it!!!..um i think u shuld make 3 changes only.

1st:
you screw everything up .
^^ say 'screwed'

2nd:
but i am still going to give you chances
^^ say 'but i am still going to give you a chance.'

3rd:
i feel like you are the one
^^ i think oyu shuld say 'you're' instead of 'you are'..its more idk i think it makes better sence..

Love it tho!!!
Aly

I love the poem exactly how it is