Comments : The Ruins

  • 15 years ago

    by Cindy

    Debbie
    What a great piece you have written for the title challenge. The imagery is so wonderful I can see the stones from Stonehenge in my mind.

    Alignments marking passage
    Seasons through the mist
    Bluestones rift with magic
    From Merlin's dark abyss

    Your word choices help to paint the picture for the readers. Letting the reader see this mystical place through your eyes.

    Awesome !
    Love Cindy

  • 15 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Wow... I've always wanted to visit Stonehenge... Your poem is amazingly vivid, with such remarkable descriptions. I could imagine every stanza unfolding in front of me and reading this piece is definitely fantastic experience.
    Your choice of words and flow are great as always in your poems.

    - Walk among the ruins
    Crest of barrrows swell
    Silent ancient sentries stare
    Faint echoes thrill the dell-
    ^^^
    You have a spelling error here, in the word 'barrow', you wrote it 'barrrow". Other than that, this is great intro to this piece, it pulled me straight into the poem.

    - Sarsen shadows lengthen
    Summer Solstice gleams
    Lichen dappled minions
    Druid's lingering dreams-
    ^^^
    Your choice of words here is fantastic. The imagery is breathtaking... this stanza also posses mystical atmosphere and great beauty.

    - Alignments marking passage
    Seasons through the mist
    Bluestones rift with magic
    From Merlin's dark abyss-
    ^^^
    This is my favorite stanza. It has flawless flow and stunning, so vivid imagery. "Bluestones rift with magic"...wow... I fell in love with that line.

    - Walk among the ruins
    Cool lintel's horseshoe door
    Staid circles mark eternity
    Mystery o'er the moor-
    ^^^
    The repetition of the first line from the beginning is truly effective. This is great ending, but I didn't wanted it to end so fast...

    Overall, another amazing piece from you. This is refreshing and original, truly captivating write.

  • 15 years ago

    by Ingrid

    Debbie,

    Such beautiful words you have used!
    I could almost picture myself walking amongst those huge stones!

    Bravo!

    Hugs,

    Ingrid

  • 15 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    ^Walk among the ruins
    Crest of barrows swell
    Silent ancient sentries stare
    Faint echoes thrill the dell^

    Enchanting stanza. The word choice, imagery and flow are impeccable.

    ^Sarsen shadows lengthen
    Summer Solstice gleams
    Lichen dappled minions
    Druid's lingering dreams^

    Articulate and creative. Clever word choice int his stanza!

    ^Alignments marking passage
    Seasons through the mist
    Bluestones rift with magic
    From Merlin's dark abyss^

    Good portrayal of the magic and mystery of Stone Henge.

    ^Walk among the ruins
    Cool lintel's horseshoe door
    Staid circles mark eternity
    Mystery o'er the moor^

    Excellent ending to a brilliant piece!

  • 15 years ago

    by Allison

    Wow, I love this poem. It deals with a lot of the stuff that I love to read about. The flow was excellent and the rhyme scheme was nice. Keep up the good work. *5/5*

  • 15 years ago

    by Emily

    You've captured the mystery. (:

  • 15 years ago

    by Cady Amato

    Wow great job! 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Barry

    Monolith stones of ancient time, blue stones
    for all to shine, the different polarity for all to see. On mound we stood together just you and me.
    Sacred ancient ground we stopped and stared in awe .... big standing stone so tall.....
    I captured the beauty....... lost in all

  • 15 years ago

    by Corinne

    It's difficult to pick my favorite stanza - because they're all wonderful. Your work is...genteel.