Comments : Lost in this world

  • 16 years ago

    by Ares

    Great way to describe real events:)

  • 16 years ago

    by Lonely Rider

    Good write...
    "Why did this happen
    Who is he and where he comes
    How did he find me
    Is this some sick joke"

    ^^ i like the way you have asked questions..
    the desperation to get answers is visible behing those words..

    "Is this world I thought was real
    only my dreams at night...? "
    ^^ liked this line..

    overall a nice poem... but i felt something was missing...maybe you could try some other words... Its just a suggestion... I just wrote what I felt.. others may like it.. :)

    keep writing..

  • 16 years ago

    by Prasad Baadkar

    In sleep we r relaxing our minds n watz eating us will come as a dream sumtimes in a good way otherwise in a bad way....

    ya everything is fine in d poem... only thing that looks missing is d dream itself..

    But thanks I have it... n itz a very good dream...

    TC n no matter wen a writer writes it turns into a poem.... n how much a reader understands out of ur thoughts depends on the reader...

    Good one.. keep writing....

  • 16 years ago

    by Gabba Gabba Hey

    Wow. Very good, scary, meaningful. Great question at the end. Be careful with getting out of poet form 'I am freaked out as a person can be' isn't aesthetically pleasing, but for the meaning of the poem, it might be very fitting. It's all up to you. I really enjoyed this poem...great job!

  • 16 years ago

    by Heba

    You did a great job, but believe me . i think that you're intelligent to the point that you can find your way and if you face any troubles. i am ready for help cuz you are not alone