First of all I think that title is utterly amazing.

-We broke the clouds as music boxes of malevolence
while stone dreams bled pearl honey of bitter concepts;-

^I like the picture which you described a lot, though in first line little threw me off word -clouds- because I really think that title is fantastic so I didn't expected to see that word in first line.
I second line, but, maybe -bitter conceptions- could be more effective if you somehow brake it from rest of that line because you already have two vivid and remarkable descriptions in that line and third is maybe unnecessary on the same place.
Anyway I truly like the start of this poem.

-are you there?-

^Honestly I think that you couldn't write this on more intense way, wow! Superb brake of rhythm and simple but somehow mind-blowing thought. I truly admire your ability to change tone of the poem this much with so little words.

-Timeless hands froze carnal mystifications
and my wordplays
carry gloomy metaphors of wretched sorrow,-

^First line literally took my breath, truly fascinating choice of words and I can see very deep hidden meaning beside of this stanza. Also I think that you expressed so much, though you could use some better word than -gloomy- in my opinion, but I just don't like something about it, it reminds me on something which in my head makes it less serious, but that is my personal impression.

-read between the lines:
^ I truly think that this is another memorable break of rhythm, totally impressive.

Obedience dismantles winged words

-I like this, truly, very clever write, in my mind it described some exposed soul.

and distant stars-

^something is truly captivating in your short lines within this poem, like here, you said so much and left clues of so many emotions behind this description, you also managed to make it vivid.

-shine with power of amethyst dawns,
circling with fragrant delusions, embracing
tales weaved with moonlit needles. -

^Brilliant stanza. It is so interesting, I admire your writing through it, very impressionable and each word that you used is great.

-Bestial thunderstorms shape
sacrilege- my addiction- of
inflamed claws which lacerate dreams;-

^You fascinated me even more here. I don't like using of -dreams- second time, but on a way you made connection between start here. Anyway this impressed me, especially first two lines, you described some bestial passion in them.

-Detuned communication
locked frail translations;
Lanterns burned down
our concrete clouds. -

^I like your metaphors here, all in all I think that this is about exposing yourself to some person, maybe opening your soul to the paper or some person.
I like the ending, very unique stanza.

Overall I love this piece, it is very deep and atmosphere in it impressed me on many ways, truly memorable. I am very glad that I read it.

Another excellent write from you

"We broke the clouds as music boxes of malevolence
while stone dreams bled pearl honey of bitter concepts;"

^^ the starting itself is so captivating...I was hooked from the start..

"are you there?"
^^ i really appreciate this break... Amazing.

"shine with power of amethyst dawns,
circling with fragrant delusions, embracing
tales weaved with moonlit needles. -"

^^again what word choice.... excellent..
Beautiful metaphors used...
The ambiance created is truly amazing..

Very well written..

Ahh!!
Adding to my faves immediatly!
This poem was awesome
it almost reminded me of spoken word
just a bit because I read it outloud
you really have a talent with vocabulary
that I would LOVE to pick up on
nice work
5/5

Loved it, really loved it, great job please write more this is great xx

Shine with power of amethyst dawns,
circling with fragrant delusions, embracing
tales weaved with moonlit needles.

Bestial thunderstorms shape
sacrilege- my addiction- of
inflamed claws which lacerate dreams;

Detuned communication
locked frail translations;
Lanterns burned down
our concrete clouds.

most beautifully written............

The format is very interesting. I must admit I immediately looked up the word "malevolent" because I had no idea what it meant. I think it's beautifully written from beginning to end. I wish I could say more, but I don't understand what the narrator is saying sometimes. I'll give an example.

"Timeless hands froze carnal mystifications"

Crap. I wrote this long comment then got logged out.
Okay, I loved the title. It goes with the poem, it's unique, and doesn't give anything away. I like that.
The beginning immediately drew me in with the "music boxes" metaphor. Though I don't like the word "as" in there. That kind of threw me off while reading it. Maybe something like "into" or "of" Just a suggestion.
I also loved the format of this poem. the short separate lines were very dramatic with the questioning.

"Lanterns burned down
our concrete clouds."

^^For some reason it sounds better to me as "burn" instead of "burned". Jsut a suggestion.

Overall, I really liked this piece. I am still amazed with the title of it. BRAVO!
5/5
~Lace

Although it sounded quite beautiful.

I didn't understand what you intro meant.
I was stuck there for a couple of minutes
Until I decided to continue on...

I like your format in this poem.
It's predictable with unpredictability.
If that make sense.

For example:
The body (middle) only has line each.

It went out smoothly out the mouth.

This is going to make me sound really stupid.

But I didn't understand what you were saying at all.

I'm a person that tries to picture poetry.
But I couldn't imagine this one.

Maybe I just didn't spend enough time trying to understand it.
Or I'm just really stupid, or something.

But..
I just don't get it.

I love the wording you used for this. It's very beautiful work. Good job.