Awww hunny, such emotional work, really well done keep on going with your poetry ok xxxx

I absolutely adore this poem,it's amazing.

I've found a lot of mistakes in it. I've found that many do not edit their poems even when corrected so I will only list them if you PM me telling me to. I wouldn't want to make a whole list for nothing.

Too many mistakes for my taste. Many people don't care about grammar, capitalization, or punctuation, but I do. It is the picture frame of the poem. After all, if someone was to frame a picture they wouldn't want a crappy frame that takes away from the real beauty, the picture itself. Mistakes are distracting.

I prefer structure when it comes to writing style, but I have nothing against people that do freestyle poems.

I felt that you used and too many times.

So, what was good about this poem? The concept. The concept was nice. It was easy to picture when I reread it. Everyone has those times when they just daze off during a good song and remember all these other things connected to it. That part I liked.

So, just work on the frame, as I call it, and maybe try a few metaphors and different words every here and there.

I'll give it a three.

The concept is unusual and different. That makes the poem interesting to read. Nice...

Firstly, I would like to say to watch your capitalization of “I”. Also, breaked is not a word, the proper language would be “broken”. “melodie” should be “melody”. “where those times has gone” should be “where those times HAVE gone”. The lines “it can really make me cry
crying ,just like i cried before” really confused me. Were you trying to say “It really makes me cry, like I have never cried before”?

Other than those few mistakes, I truly enjoyed this poem- the emotion was there and relatable. Keep writing, you have talent- embrace it and nurture it!

Wow that was beautiful ... simply beautiful ! Well written and beautifully penned. It's heartfelt, honest and sweet...And behind each line lies a sad sorrowful cry...5/5 great job, keep it up

I love this poem i no how you feel!!!

Your poem has a lot of errors in it, actually... too many. I like reading poems but one thing that gets really annoying is when people don't check their grammar, spelling, or capitalization. You should check your work before you put it up. Maybe you'll do better next time.

More beatiful that the first one
and how i wonder,i think you ment now
they say What touches us the most is... Being hurt by some1 U Trust A Lot... .... OR .... Being Trusted by some1 U have Hurt a Lot...
but forgivness is top nobility
i wish you had forgiven him
keep writing

Good ... it has a resemblance in the song..... YESTERDAY ONCE MORE by THE CARPENTERS....or maybe you were inspired by the song....

but i love it ....