Wow. it is a wonderful one

Awww thats so loving. so emotionally written but its good. well done for sharing it xxx

Another great write
Wonderful emotion
Beautifully written
5/5

No offence or anything but this poem didn't really contain any emotion. Since this poem was about someone passing away I thought it would have been filled with sadness and possibly anger.. but I didn't feel that. Towards the end there is a little but I feel that there could be so much more.

Personally I think the poem lacks color.. if you know what I mean. So maybe you could use more descriptive words, maybe some more adjectives..

Don't get me wrong, this poem isn't bad, it just needs a little fixing up. And I'm not trying to be some shallow bitc*h I'm just telling you what I think... Anyway.. 4/5 from me.

I'm deeply sorry for your loss
but you wrote a great poem
a lot of feeling in it,
5/5