My mom and dad are never gonna get back together if thats what you mean, but I understand how you feel. I have a screwed up life so far. But I hope yours gets better. 5/5

Aww...this is so sad

Aw what a sad poem. Its as if its written from like a childs point of view cause it just seems so simple. If that makes sense, you get your point across in a simple way - very touching.

Kelly
xx

Beautifully written. Starting sentence with I dream everytime gave more power to the whole poem, on my opinion, and also you created such innocent atmosphere. So cute and sweet. Thought in it's innocent, it had such deep meaning to it. Sadness is hidden but overwhelming.

Brilliant work. 5/5

Such a sad write, although predictable, it was heartfelt and genuine.

Well done

Michael

Such a sad write, although predictable, it was heartfelt and genuine.

Well done

Michael

This has happened to too many people, it's not fair, i'm sorry it happened to you, but i thought you created a good poem

You should capitalize I through the poem.

This piece holds tones of overwhelming sadness that deeply touched me. Simplicity of whole poem highlighted sorrowful, heartfelt emotions that you portrayed. Nicely done.

Sometimes dreams are better than reality. and moms and dads are better off there than near. over all good poem and flow.

btw, sometimes what you dream comes true and sometimes they just make things worst.

p.s. thank you for the comment on my poem '' freedom'' i am glad you liked it.

take care.

Incredible poem, so simple and elegant yet so powerful, really enjoyed this:)

This poem was so heart-pulling and so sad...It was such a short and beautiful piece and it was obviosuly deep. I loved it.
<3Raych

and thanks for commenting on my poem.

Naw, I love this poem. The wording was lovely.
5/5

Cheers xo

Sad poem... I've found it very touchy! Good write.

This poem is soooo sad it puts you in the position of a little orphan girl i luv it great job but if it's true SORRY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I dream i had a mummy
i dream that she loves me
i dream we could hold hands
for all the world to see

i dream i had a daddy
i dream he couldn't shout
i dream he loved my mummy
and we went on fun days out

i dream we had a cuddle
i dream we ate ice cream
i dream that they are real
but they're only just my dream.

This is such a simple poem, but it's effective and gets the message across..

The repitition of the 'I dream' worked really well because it highlights the emotion here.

The only thing you need to do is capitalize the 'I's throughout.

This is really sad.
Nice work..
5/5

[thanks for the comment, btw]

Beautiful but sad as always. 5/5, Em