Bleeding ears cannot take this abuse
your lies they fill my head and I storm
Storm out of myself and become you
raging and screaming in anger I do
`I find that you like to repeat a lot -- I don't know whether it's intentional, but it takes away from the piece. "They" is not needed -- and the rhyme of you and do ... it's just weird. Forced.

will you ever apologize for your criticize
`critiques -- grammar mistake . Either way, it doesn't soud quite right. Thesaurus time!

do you even see me standing here
pleading and begging for your love
or am I dead in your eyes
like the hearts you have killed before
`Stunning choice of words. They're very powerful -- and the pain is just busting out of these lines. Favourite stanza, by far. It's so emotionally beautiful.

please oh great one tell me how I am
because I don't hear your mouth enough
`Hm, I adore the mockery, but "oh great one" ... Better choice of words, m'dear? It just sounds too funky and overdramatic.

Just work on it -- edit a little here and there, and I know this piece will be much better than it is. Well done tho :)

--..MiNDYY

This is really good i enjoyed reading this was very strongly put together, keep this good work up xx

"Bleeding ears cannot take this abuse
your lies they fill my head and I storm
Storm out of myself and become you
raging and screaming in anger I do"

^^ well written... 'bleeding ears'.. brilliant..
U repeated 'storm' here, may u should change that...

"I'm sure you wouldn't care though would you
oh great one please enlighten me with your words
tell me what it is that I am doing so wrong
bring to silence and let my bleeding ears ring"

^^ this very heartfelt... very emotional... i could feel the pain , the frustration reflected by these lines...

overall..a good write..

Criticize- possibly should be critisim.?

should adjective not be objective?

^ just a few sugestions.

secondly, no punctuation, you need grammar for a poem like this is order to get the whole beat and rhyme of it down to a tee, for the reader.

the concept of the poem and the story behind it is something that has been written over and over and over again, ive said this to a lot of people lately.. make your unique!

don't take nay of that ^ wrong, its constructive critism.