Wow!..this was good...um i only have a few suggestions, because i dindnt think some of it made sence....
umm, it would provablychange the ryhme scheme, but u decide if u would take my advice or not.

i think on the 1st stanca u shuld say we forget instead of we're forgot..

on the second one change tear to tears

thats it
tha last stanza was my fav.

Aly

Absolitely wonderful poem

Fantastic x

Awesome! I loved it! 5/5

WOW WHAT A GREAAATT POEM REALLY YOU MUST OF PUT SOME THOUGHT INTO THIS ONE ... GREAT JOB I LOOOVD IT =]

I like the rhythm it has.
its amazing.

Nice

Wow that was touching...reminds me of procrastination too

nice job!

I loved the concept of this poem, but i really didn't see where you were going with it.

I like the poem.. but like Jenni I couldn't really see what the point of this was.. But maybe that was the whole point. But other than that it was really a nice piece.

I really enjoyed the repetition in this piece and you portrayed the message that was entwined in this poem very well. 5/5