Aw!..this was so sad!!.. i really liked this..it was like he would die for her..wow..great!
Aly

I like the sense in it!!!

Very sad...but simple with a great flowing rhyme to it....I loved it...5/5!

This is a short poem, but with the words you used it came out as very emontial....very good job and beautifuly written :] 5/5

Outstanding,
Short..
but outstanding.

Even though this is quite short, its a very good poem. I got goosebumps reading it, and i almost never get goosebumps. i also like the style of the poem, I can never write couplets, so very good on that!!!

5/5

An amazingly deep piece of poetry that really moved me. a brilliant rhyme and fantastic flow

A faint glint of hope, resting in his eye
Maybe his sister didn't mean to die
^^ ^^ ^^ ^^
this stanza touched me the most. it is an absolutely brilliant piece of poetry

5/5

Keep Writing, lovely
As Always,
~NinjaGirl~

I have a younger brother, I really love him, it's very touching...i love this poem specially
the first two lines

5/5

"A faint glint of hope, resting in his eye
Maybe his sister didn't mean to die"
&
"Maybe just maybe, she wanted to live
Just for her life back, anything he'd give"

^^ You used the world "Maybe" too often here, so it became a little bit annoying. Instead of using the line 'Maybe his sister didn't mean to die', you could use a question: "Did his sister really mean to die?"

"To see her alive, not dead in her blood
He'd fly to heaven, like good brothers should"

^^ That second line, "He'd fly to heaven, like good brothers should" was truly beautiful.

"He couldn't cope, without her by his side
So just to see her, a hero he died"

^^ I wasn't sure whether to call the ending beautiful or extremely heartbreaking. It's certainly a beautiful *and* extremely heartbreaking poem though.

Very well done.

Fantastic. Loved it.
Just exceptional.
5/5 easy from me.
xxxx

I LIKE THIS POEM.

Oh wow.
u have talent girl.
5\5
xox
katrina

Sad that he would end his own life for his sister. and it is sad that there are people that do that. 5/5
Aaron