Comments : Like Good Brothers Should

  • 11 years ago

    by Unamed

    Aw!..this was so sad!!.. i really liked was like he would die for!

  • 11 years ago

    by SweeT pOisOn

    I like the sense in it!!!

  • 11 years ago

    by XxxBeenThereRockedThatxxX

    Very sad...but simple with a great flowing rhyme to it....I loved it...5/5!

  • 11 years ago

    by iloveyouandrew

    This is a short poem, but with the words you used it came out as very emontial....very good job and beautifuly written :] 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Tyler Durden

    but outstanding.

  • 11 years ago

    by Poetess Lana

    Even though this is quite short, its a very good poem. I got goosebumps reading it, and i almost never get goosebumps. i also like the style of the poem, I can never write couplets, so very good on that!!!


  • 11 years ago

    by NinjaGirl

    An amazingly deep piece of poetry that really moved me. a brilliant rhyme and fantastic flow

    A faint glint of hope, resting in his eye
    Maybe his sister didn't mean to die
    ^^ ^^ ^^ ^^
    this stanza touched me the most. it is an absolutely brilliant piece of poetry


    Keep Writing, lovely
    As Always,

  • 11 years ago

    by Bare My Paradox

    I have a younger brother, I really love him, it's very touching...i love this poem specially
    the first two lines


  • 11 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    "A faint glint of hope, resting in his eye
    Maybe his sister didn't mean to die"
    "Maybe just maybe, she wanted to live
    Just for her life back, anything he'd give"

    ^^ You used the world "Maybe" too often here, so it became a little bit annoying. Instead of using the line 'Maybe his sister didn't mean to die', you could use a question: "Did his sister really mean to die?"

    "To see her alive, not dead in her blood
    He'd fly to heaven, like good brothers should"

    ^^ That second line, "He'd fly to heaven, like good brothers should" was truly beautiful.

    "He couldn't cope, without her by his side
    So just to see her, a hero he died"

    ^^ I wasn't sure whether to call the ending beautiful or extremely heartbreaking. It's certainly a beautiful *and* extremely heartbreaking poem though.

    Very well done.

  • 11 years ago

    by Dutch

    Fantastic. Loved it.
    Just exceptional.
    5/5 easy from me.

  • 11 years ago

    by M00TM00T


  • 11 years ago

    by xoxkatrinaxox

    Oh wow.
    u have talent girl.

  • 10 years ago

    by PoetryKnight

    Sad that he would end his own life for his sister. and it is sad that there are people that do that. 5/5