Comments : Like Good Brothers Should

  • 12 years ago

    by Unamed

    Aw!..this was so sad!!.. i really liked this..it was like he would die for her..wow..great!
    Aly

  • 12 years ago

    by SweeT pOisOn

    I like the sense in it!!!

  • 12 years ago

    by XxxBeenThereRockedThatxxX

    Very sad...but simple with a great flowing rhyme to it....I loved it...5/5!

  • 12 years ago

    by iloveyouandrew

    This is a short poem, but with the words you used it came out as very emontial....very good job and beautifuly written :] 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Tyler Durden

    Outstanding,
    Short..
    but outstanding.

  • 12 years ago

    by Poetess Lana

    Even though this is quite short, its a very good poem. I got goosebumps reading it, and i almost never get goosebumps. i also like the style of the poem, I can never write couplets, so very good on that!!!

    5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by NinjaGirl

    An amazingly deep piece of poetry that really moved me. a brilliant rhyme and fantastic flow

    A faint glint of hope, resting in his eye
    Maybe his sister didn't mean to die
    ^^ ^^ ^^ ^^
    this stanza touched me the most. it is an absolutely brilliant piece of poetry

    5/5

    Keep Writing, lovely
    As Always,
    ~NinjaGirl~

  • 12 years ago

    by Bare My Paradox

    I have a younger brother, I really love him, it's very touching...i love this poem specially
    the first two lines

    5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    "A faint glint of hope, resting in his eye
    Maybe his sister didn't mean to die"
    &
    "Maybe just maybe, she wanted to live
    Just for her life back, anything he'd give"

    ^^ You used the world "Maybe" too often here, so it became a little bit annoying. Instead of using the line 'Maybe his sister didn't mean to die', you could use a question: "Did his sister really mean to die?"

    "To see her alive, not dead in her blood
    He'd fly to heaven, like good brothers should"

    ^^ That second line, "He'd fly to heaven, like good brothers should" was truly beautiful.

    "He couldn't cope, without her by his side
    So just to see her, a hero he died"

    ^^ I wasn't sure whether to call the ending beautiful or extremely heartbreaking. It's certainly a beautiful *and* extremely heartbreaking poem though.

    Very well done.

  • 12 years ago

    by Dutch

    Fantastic. Loved it.
    Just exceptional.
    5/5 easy from me.
    xxxx

  • 11 years ago

    by M00TM00T

    I LIKE THIS POEM.

  • 11 years ago

    by xoxkatrinaxox

    Oh wow.
    u have talent girl.
    5\5
    xox
    katrina

  • 11 years ago

    by PoetryKnight

    Sad that he would end his own life for his sister. and it is sad that there are people that do that. 5/5
    Aaron