Wow kayla, i'm speechless, honestly. this is a very sad poem, especially coming from the queen of peppy. :P
but i loved it, nontheless.

She hides alone in her room,
Looks to the stars at night.
Forever wrapped in coldness,
While longing to see the light.

^^ this stanza is very relatable, especially the third line. the flow was gorgeous, by the way.

Never to know true love,
She cries herself to sleep.
Until the boy comes along,
Making her lonely heart leap.

^^ god. once again, relatable....only problem is..his heart doesn't always leap back, which is a shame, hmm?

Can't seem to get him out of her mind,
Wishing he'll always be there to hold.
Only seeing him as the hero,
In every fairytale she's been told.

^^ this made me think of "if you can't get somebody out of your mind, maybe he's meant to be there.."

Looking at herself in the mirror,
She decides to strive for perfection.
Covering her pretty face in make-up,
She promises she'll win his affection.

^^it's funny how the metaphorical mask can quickly be found in makeup...how we lose ourselves trying to be somebody else..to seem perfect. DON"T DO IT KAYLA!!! <3 i love you the way you are!!!

She waits for him all day,
Trying to feel better with lies.
Then he steps in the doorway,
To tell her one final goodbye.

^^i was like...HooRAY! happy poem...orrrr not. this is a beautiful twist, placed flawlessly within the poem. beautiful.

She runs away crying,
That night she lost her man.
All of her light was taken away,
No one saw her pretty face again

^^ again..just so heartachingly sad. it's beautiful, but a forlorn kind of beauty.

this poem is amazing kayla, simply gorgeous...5/5

An amazing write hun, very gripping.
I loved how your started the piece and ended it the same way; her being sad.
It shows life doesn't always give you happy endings.

Beautifully done,
5/5---Elly,x

Great

Nice

Wow this poem is really good and I really enjoyed it. Hope this didn't happen to you.=)

This is an amazing poem.
I loved every line of it.
soo true for so many.
great work babe.
i loved it! :]