"Sky is grey, and nothing is true
But you don't worry I'm with you
Night is too dark and light is too dim
You can't but I can hear the scream
But don't worry I'm with you"

I like your repetition of "Im with you" in this first stanza. Gives it power.

"Cut down trees, wiped out plants
In this murky world, you're busy with your slants
And time is short; you'll get no time to rue
But not alone; here I'm with you"

I like how you changed it from "Don't worry I'm with you" to "Here I'm with you" gives it change which is good.

"Playing with the nature, frozen by your thoughts
Birds stop chirping as rivers shrink to distraught
The world is changing like it never used to
But happy in our own world, me and you"

I love how you said how bad the world is outside. But when you are with this person in your own world it can be perfect and forget everything else around. amazing.

"By clinging your hands, I'll whisper - I'm with you"

So sweet I can actually imagine it.

"So the sky is grey and days are few
I'm with this race I'm with you
A night will come then there'll be no sun
We will be dancing together in the dying fun
Time will halt to say - now this is true
As we don't deserve to be here, we'll get our due "

I love this ending, it was great, a great way to end this poem I loved it great write I enjoyed reading this.

I really have no words on my mouth but I just want to say this is so beautiful poem. My heart thanks you. The flow was good, the theme was great... It is amazing. One of my favourite poems.

Kisi ka sath samesh or harwat ho our vo bhi uska jiska hum chahete hai toh, life become so easy,sweet,cool,
well done.

Sourav this is really an outstanding poem i like it and i like the rthyming tooooo =))))
keep it uppppp :)))))

Dont worry.. I m with u...

Lovely.. lovely poem.. sourav..

this poemz simply gr8.. all d lines r superbly paced n placed too...

thoughts in them r simply amazing, awsum..

keep it up..

best wishz..

karan

What a very sad picture your words paint.

Faded dried grass, no tinge of green
You've achieved anything but serene
Someday you'll be dying with your blue
But don't worry I'm with you

This brings tears to my eyes. You have done a great job on this. How we are killing our Earth :)
Take Care Cindy

I really liked this a lot..and hey.. I added you 2 my favorites!! God bless!

Love it loads.. it's so sweet

Not the sort of poem that would usually grab my attention but you've written it in such a way that it really captivates anyone who chances across it.
Absolutey brilliant.
Love how you've kept the theme flowing through out by using different ways to repeat the same message: "I'm with you"

"A night will come then there'll be no sun
We will be dancing together in the dying fun
Time will halt to say - now this is true
As we don't deserve to be here, we'll get our due"

this stanza had me, i was reading and not really following it, then i read this and had to reread everything, and i agree with every other comment(if there good) that this is an excellent, well put together poem. I'm all about nature, and we are killing it. but like you said, we will get our due. AWESOME 5/5