First of all I wanna say that I love you so much!

But now to the poem;

This is amazing babe, Its different to any of your other stuff that you have written, And is filled with such deep emotion. (not that your other stuff isn't, because lets face it, anyone who reads them could see that they are lol)

The style of this write is different to anything you have written, Its brilliant. The rhyming and the flow was perfect throughout and did not seem forced at all. The imagery you created was unimaginable because without your words the image would not be possible. You did a great job with this poem baby.

"As we lay in this soft candle light; Baby, you don't know,"

Great words! Different! I love how through the poem you used different descriptive words that you can rarely find in other work!

"The mesmerizing look in your eyes; twinkling and cyan-blue,
Entwined fingertips lay locked, heart beating erratically for you."

Again The descriptions you used in this stanza are amazing and create such great imagery and show so much emotion!

"Tracing my finger, slowly, around the intricate beauty of your face,
The love we share, so gentle; full of admiration, charm and grace."

I love this poem I really do, I cant stop saying how much I love the imagery you create and the descriptive writing!

"Interwoven thoughts, my future; your breath keeps me alive,
Memories carved in ice so sensually, your love helps me survive."

I love this stanza, I want to say its my favorite but I cant! I love every stanza in this poem! I cant just pick one!

I love the way that you are describing the way you feel and I love it even more as I know that this is written to me =) hehehehe

"Ink flows around my body; from that heart I stained on my palm,"

I love this part of the stanza, it shows such great depth of emotion and feelings, and how much I mean to you.

"Our names permanently laced within it"

I also love the ending to the stanza it fits perfectly and does not seem forced! I love how you show how much our relationship means to you in words!

"As we lay in this soft candle light; Baby, you don't know,
How I wish that my love for you, in this instant, would show."

[So let's freeze it.]
[Freeze this moment in time.]

Great ending to an amazing poem! I love the repetition you used at the beginning and the end, I also loved the [So let’s freeze it.]
[Freeze this moment in time.] These words are great and I love how you repeat "So lets freeze it" after every stanza! I love the last line "Freeze this moment in time" Its a brilliant ending and to me creates great imagery!

You did an amazing job babe!
I love it and you babe. The vocab choice you chose was outstanding. So creative and full of emotion! Brilliant baby =) deserves a lot more than a 5!

Love you

xxxxxxx

DUUU!
This got me a-tingly.

Favorite line:

The mesmerizing look in your eyes; twinkling and cyan-blue,
Entwined fingertips lay locked, heart beating erratically for you.

Erratically. Such a good word for the beating of a heart.

I believe you should turn this into a song.
It has the structure of a song.

I can actually hear, [So let's freeze it] in the background.
Spoken from a lover, whispering.

DAAAAAAAAAAAYUUUUUUM!

Lost part.

I didn't get to that yet.
Now that I did,
[Freeze this moment in time.]

That is a wonderful ending to a beautiful poem.

You had everything in there.
Your personality [[baby]]
Punctuation [[everywhere]]
Grammar [[perfect]]
Rhyme/Rhythm [[on beat]]

I won't say perfect.
Because I've never seen anything perfect before.
But, I have to say, I really, really, realy like this :]

Interesting but I totally understood it in a way...great job...^_^

I have to say that I fell in love with your poem. It's perfect. 5/5

That's such a sweet poem!! Keep on writing!!

I feel like the continuous so lets freeze it takes away from the meaning of the poem. Of course this is just a suggestion, but I really enjoyed it excluding that aspect.

WOW This was one of the most beautiful poems I have ever read I was like glued to the screen reading I wanted to read more and more You have an amazing talent

=)

A wonderful poem. No need to explain. I nominated it. :)

I know how that feels and i hope the memory never fades its this sortof thing that keeps future hope alive. good poem, thanks

Aaaawwww thats so sweet!!

its really well written with a good choice of words, its strong and powerful and so honest...

she's luck to have you

keep up the good work hun!!!

xoxo

I really enjoyed reading this! Was it written to be a song? It has that lyrical, musical feel to it and its beautiful.