The story?
Quite adorable.

First off.
What drawn me to this poem was the title.
Well, dear, it's kind of wrong punctuation.

"We're together but apart"

Should be your title.
Have the apostrophe in there :]

Eyes lock concealing a secret

Can't that be...
Their eyes lock, concealing a secret.
And what kept me focused on that part,
Was that there was no comma.

that no one shall know or else.

Or else what?
It sounds, well, like someone's going to kill them.
To me, it's sounds overdramatic AND cliched.

Like an action movie, "Or else"

Your hand touching my skin(,) I feel it surge,

Forgot 'nother comma.

I read it again, more slowly.
Either they're both thinkin' of one 'nother before they go to sleep;
Or, they're just talkin' to theirselves

Like I said, it's adorable.
But maybe, you could work on your grammatica :]

Waw its beautiful and full of feeling,
you got talent and creative imagination,
i see you paint it with colors,
flow was realy good ,
it deserve more than 5/5
well done
noha

This is such a sweet poem. I can really relate to this in so many ways. And the flow of your words was amazing. You did a great job with this one.

Aww thats cute