Very cute...short and sweet......It would be more attractive it it were in stanzas though....just thought I'd give you some advice great job though! ^_^

Reads to me like a journal or diary entry. Perhaps if you did put it in stanzas it would pick up a rhythm. Proof read and spell check. seems as though you wote in haste.

Ok this piece isn’t your best it needs to be in stanzas and the are a lot of mistakes you keep forgetting to put capital I also when you use a , you do not need a capital only when you use a . and you need to leave a space after either there are some spelling mistakes that need changing and I also suggest these changes:
"I think back of when i used to cared" - I think back of when I used to care"
"I can goes days without thinking" - I can go days without thinking
"some many thing have changed" - so many things have changed

I like how this is more like a journal entry its a different way to put it and it was so sweet but kinda sad either way you did a great job!