Short. To the Point. Excellent. Wonderful.

Then I feel this pleasure
Unlike any other
I can't help but moan louder
I wonder if I'll recover
^^^^
i really like this stanza it really expresses ho w you felt really well.

Wow thats wow i am shocked but wow

=]

Hun just bcuz u had sex doesn't mean that ur a woman. I hope that u really don't believe that. Umm but ur poem was good. I think that maybe u should have been more detailed with ur writing but it still was good. If u want u can check out my poem called "Our Ecstasy" I think that I was pretty detailed in that 1. But it's up 2 u.

.:Rach:.

Um, it was just a poem. Not about me. A POEM.

Well just ignore those people, i think your poem is creative, and i give you kudos on having the balls to write it about one's first time, keep up the good work ^^

I totally agree on the previous
comment from Jake and give
you top credit,
I thought that your poem was really
well written and expressing
and straight to the point!!
Well done!!
***take care***

Wow great poem

Again you chose a topic that is overused and made it your own! You've got some talent! Keep in writing :)

I really like this its relly nice