A little melodramatic, I never really understood why people punish themselves for other peoles choices. 'Move on' or 'you should have spoken up sooner' come to mind when I read this.
As for the flow of the poem, it was pretty good. I really enjoyed the repetition at the end, I believe you tied things together quite nicely.

I loved it
It is most definitly going in my favorites
I am going through the same thing right now
So this poem just summed up everything for me
you are a wonderful poet keep it up
5/5

A boy who is lost , because she has been found
The love of his life, turned upside down
`Oh, interesting take on the being lost and the chick being found. It makes me think, he lost his way the minute another guy found her for himself; now she's been flipped -- since it's wished that she was the boy's, but is now taken.

People search a lifetime, to have a love like this
But the cries of this boy, shows his innocence is missed
`Oh, now it gets a bit dramatic. The loss of innocence, but hey, it's just the emotion into words of what some feel.

A suicidal mindset, because she cant be his
Killing himself for her, dreams of doing this
`Aw, now the rhyme sounds forced, like you thought of the word and figured out a way to twist the words and tweak it so that it'd rhyme. This is a couplet that you should work on.

He wishes he could treat her good, and tell, "her i love you"
And for his feelings to be understood, and for their love to be true
`and tell her, "I love you," ** typos. I feel like "good" sounds too much like adolescent slang that makes it sounds immature and childish. Maybe choose a different word?

But this will never happen, the boy realizes this
He realizes that she, will never be his
`Ooh...the repitition of "this" in the same line takes away from the piece. I feel like you're trying too hard to rhyme -- poems don't always have to rhyme continuously, love.

So he will die alone, young and broken hearted
He is bleeding to death, waiting to be departed
`"Waiting to be departed" -- another rhyme that soudns forced and tweaked so that it may be shoved within the poem. The rhyme's definitely different from what's typically chosen, but I feel like it's the same cliche melodramatic words that are used a lot now-a-days.

Their was a boy who was lost, because she was found
The only love of his life, was turned upside down
Their once was beautiful feelings, that ended up in cries
And a passionate love, ended a boys life.
`Both of the "their"'s should be "There." The last two lines ... the grammar is off in the third line. It should be, "There were once beautiful feelings" or something similar to that, just letting you know :)

Overall, there were times when some lines were complete hyperboles; dramatic to the max, but hey, poetry's like that half the time (and more). The repitition at the end, really created an aura of emotion that reaches out to the reader (to me, anyway). You still need to work on exceeding beyond this level that you're at, but I feel like this was better than the two that I read if I look at the piece altogether. And your syllabication's a lot better here, I'm glad to say :)

--..MiNDYY

This is a pretty poem, I think you used your words well, and I understand very well were your coming from with the poem. 5/5

OMG MY EYES WERE FILLED CAROLINE ??????? AWWWW

Don't get any ideas of your work LOL

no suicide to my buddy

Oh my ricky ... wow im speechless you have no idea. that was amazing ... but promise me one thing do not really try to commit suicide loves because im always here for you

WOW!! amazing!! thats all i can really say amazing!! great write

Wowm this was deep
the flow was wonderful
the topic was unique and so sad
5/5

This made me cry...
Beautiful, from start to finish...
5/5

Cheers xo

Woah.
really good.

i can totally relaaate.
5/5
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A really emotion prospect put into wods really well. I love the way the last stanza is repeated but tweaked slighty, with amissve effect on the reader. Please keep writing!

Wow,
this poem is really emotion...it also as a voice to it if u know wat i mean..Well written..love the way the last stanza is repeated...great job keep writing..5/5

This is a really good poem!Keep up the awesome work!!

Wow i could feel your pain reading this but because you cant be with her doesnt mean you wont find some one better i believe this because....i did so keep tryin to find the girl that you will spend the rest of your life with maybe it will be her or maybe another...

Awww... this is so sad.

again the emotion is really strong and portrayed beautifully, i can understand the pain and the suffering from reading this, which is what you should get out of every poem.

the flow was a bit sketchy and times but i dont think it took away from anything so nicely done =]

This is relle good, i like it a lot, it might be my favorite so far

This was such a beautiful poem
because it unraveled a story
that a lot of young people face in todays times.
My brother had a friend who committed
suicide over a girl so I
could really relate and saw him in this poem.
over all it was a great write!!
Loved your words that you used!! 5/5 :)
***Take care***

A good promised poem one cant expect all these sentements out of a very young poet ,but let me please ask is the lover is still adolscent like you?

Well, the poem was good, I really liked it but man, life can suck sometimes...
=[ I'm sorry.