Thats good, youve done well xx

It was okay, I felt, but I've read much better by you. I think my favorite stanza was the second one, followed by the first. I felt this piece was good at the beginning, but then lost its power, as most pieces do. I think the last line of the last stanza, should read:

'Or were you just blind to me?'

Instead of:

'Or were you blind to me?'

I look forward to your next piece, and hope that its more like your usual work.

Brad