"than" in the fifth line should be "then"

Overall, this is truly a wonderful write, so beautiful and profound from the beginning to the end. I admire poems that can take me to completely different world and this one is certainly one of those. I deeply enjoyed in every line. Also, the imagery that you portrayed is magnificent.

Keep up!

.... ok, speechless.... that was bloody brilliant! Far better than any of the sonnets I have ever wrote, and by far the best sonnet I ever had the honor of reading. :)

5/5

Really really good poem :))!
very well written, and the ending is brill :)
"As wrinkles search among souls, Love of those departed"

5/5 :)!

Very nicee poemmm..
touchinggg and lovliii
keeep itt uppp...
xxx

What a wonderful poem!!..it was really well written and ur words were so expressive...I liked it...keep it up:)..