Haha i like it..and i would hate to have been that girl..lol..but its good

Great poem, its very visual.

the short sentences add an amzing effect.

great job. 5/5

It is a good story line but it could have been better. It needs more subtle wording and more seduction. That is what a vampire is all about.. Subtleness and Seduction

Its good...its short but it tells a story which is great...

Awesome!!..I'm really a big fan of Vampires..may be I'm one:p...Really a very nice poem,good job:)..keep it up..