Dang... just... dang. haha

Danny,

You have the skills to get the message and the feelings across. At my poetry club we are always instructed to leave 'filler words'out. That means words like I, me, you..the little words. Like use them one time to let people know who the poem is about, but then write it without those words. I think you would be able to do this. I am not a master at it myself, but I am trying, lol! I hope you appreciate my comment. It is not meant to belittle you, but to help you, like you did to me:)

Good poem, btw:)

Take care,

Ingrid