This was an excellent work, it really just described one of my freinds, but you know those people really don't deserve to feel sad for them because they only want to hurt you.

keep up.

Great poem dude! Your choice of words was totally amazing - it gave the poem just so much more depth.

"Do you think
I am sitting silently waiting for apologize?
Do you think
I am eager to hear another one of your lies?
NO, I am not expecting anything
Please wake up and realize
You are just like the others
Another copy of the bad guys"

^Great start but I'm not too convinced that the word "apologize" should go there. Other than that it was a great first stanza that brought in the anger and resentment felt.

"One word can describe You
No need to explore
No need to dive deep
It's obvious on the shore
"Selfish" describes you
No need for more
If heartless is an item
Then you are its core "

^^This was an amazing stanza. It had so much depth and great imagery was created here. It's amazing how much talent you have that you can convery your feelings so simply with a few words and yet the reader is just totally drawn in to feel the same.

"I didn't mind being an old jar
If you will be a beautiful vase
I didn't mind being the last
Since you will be the first
I tried my best
In order to keep the smile upon your face
I fought to keep you the winner
Because you see life as a race"

^^Once again this was a great stanza. This one stuck in my head straight from the first line. Sacrifices for a friendship are all and well but that doesn't mean you should sacrifice your own needs for another.

"I don't know what's in your mind
And how far your dreams can reach
Maybe you are aiming for the ocean
Because you already have passed the beach
I think you don't know what's energy of your dreams?
And how much blood your dreams do they leech
But what I really worry about is in order to fulfill all your dreams
Will I be able to afford the drops you need to fulfill each?"

^^Nice ending though it seems long-drawn. The third last line doesn't seem to convincing and a bit out of place.

But overall I thought this was another one of your great works. 5/5 from me.

I didn't mind being an old jar
If you will be a beautiful vase
I didn't mind being the last
Since you will be the first
I tried my best
In order to keep the smile upon your face
I fought to keep you the winner
Because you see life as a race

Adel,

In your words I find so much comittment and a willingness to take a step back to let the other be in the spotlights.
You truly have a heart of gold. It is not your fault if the person you love does not deserve to be loved.
I am proud to call you my friend:)

Superhugs,

Ingrid

Wow x.x i know my comment iz gonna b shorter than all the otherz lol. but anyhowz this iz a very very deep poem it can definately reach into almost anyonez heart and pull out sumthing good....u have very strong wordz never let them escape from u.. alwayz grasp them and create sumthing with them even if that means creating a 5,000 page story u alwayz hav a great skill with words that iz a definite^^ don't ever waist your gift :)

keep up great worx!!! u will alwayz hav my vote for confidence^^
-d

Adel tat was fantastic again....

Ya d words here have questions n answers too..

We do a lot to keep up relationships n friendships without expecting anything from the other..... Also we do not let d other kno wat all we have done cuz we do n take it as our responsibility... N sumtimes we too need d care n attention.... N we never get it wen i9t matters in time..

Still we smile at dear life n walk on keep on doing good for d other we keep on praying for d other...

Though at times there will b cold n silent wars... but tay all vanish like d night n every gloom is replaced by a smiling dawn.... a smiling sunshine to greet our lives n face...

Fantastic poem fren...

Keep it up..

Best wishz...

Karan;)

This is really great bro!!!
Great words n amazing write.

Sometimes u give everythg to the one u like but its never enough for them.

God bless u bro!!

The last stanza was my favorite
gd job again bro

~gIrL~

Do you think I am sitting silently
waiting for you to apologize?
Do you think
I am eager to hear another one of your lies?
NO, I am not expecting anything
Please wake up and realize
You are just like the others
Another copy of the bad guys
=>I like this stanza. The begin is good. I imagine in my end an empty room and male's voice speaking me this words with angry straight face.

One word can describe You
No need to explore
No need to dive deep
It's obvious on the shore
"Selfish" describes you
No need for more
If heartless is an item
Then you are its core
=> I think 4 last lines of this stanza are very well-written. I specially like the way you say "If heartless is an item
Then you are its core "

I didn't mind being an old jar
If you would be a beautiful vase
I didn't mind being the last
Since you would be the first
I tried my best
In order to keep the smile upon your face
I fought to keep you the winner
Because you see life as a race
=> I know the feeling...when your friends are ALWAYS having like a competition who did best about something. They are always bragging about what they have done. Maybe you did sometimes better but you did not want to upset them or make them feel sad and you did not told... But they never really understand why you let the to win that stupid computer game you were playing or let them shine about telling others how cool they are.

I don't know what's in your mind
And how far your dreams can reach
Maybe you are aiming for the ocean
Because you already have passed the beach
Maybe you don't know, the energy of you dreams
And how much blood do they leech
but what I really worry about is in order to fulfill your dreams
Will I be able to afford the drops you need to fulfill each?
=> The last lines were the ending leaves an open question...Will I be able to afford the drops ou need to fulfill each? Yes...result is...another crack in your heart...

I think this poem is extremely well-written and you have put so much real feelings and described everything so no reader will stay cold. This is another amazing poem from Adel

Omg I positivley loved this poem.
Besides it's great flow I could really relate to it.
Great job.
5/5

Assalamo aleikom, it's really amazing ur poem that's touching ur heart (of course 4d one has been n this situation)
Mabrouk ! 5/5

Assalamo aleikom, it's really amazing ur poem that's touching ur heart (of course 4d one has been n this situation)
Mabrouk ! 5/5