Comments : I Hate That I've Liked You This Much.

  • 15 years ago

    by Finalgravedigger

    I can relate all to well to your poem, ive felt this way before its miserable truly. I wish you all the best if this is happening to you 5/5 maybe u can read one of mine.

  • 15 years ago

    by babblingxbrooke

    I can really relate to this.
    you did a great job wording it and the emotions were really strong!

  • 15 years ago

    by BrokenREALiTy

    I'm starting to realize that I hate everything.
    I hate all the times I liked you,
    All the time I hung on hoping and praying something great would happen,
    But nothing turned into anything spectacular.
    `Edit this stanza . The last line, I like the concept, but for an opening stanza, it wasn't as strong as the others I've read from you. Like maybe:

    "I'm starting to realize that I hate everything:
    I hate all the times I've liked you,
    And all the times I've hung onto the hope,
    Praying that something great would happen,
    But nothing turned into anything spectacular."
    -- Again, though, it's your piece :)

    I hate that I liked you so long,
    That I developed feelings for you that I can no longer let go of; the kind that just don't dissolve automatically.
    `I didn't like this stanza. You just repeat your everlasting feelings using the same words, and it just seemed unnecessary, though I like the "dissolving" idea, so maybe incorporate that into another stanza?

    I hate that I fell for someone who I didn't know that well,
    I don't like how I never have yet made that move that I've wanted to make for such a long time,
    But I need to face the facts, maybe I'm not good enough for you.
    `You have a knack for writing really long lines, huh? The "who" in the first line was avoidable -- I don't see the need for it there. The second line was a tad bit too extensive, but the third line? Amazing! A simple phrase and thought, but it goes beautifully in this piece.

    I just hate that every bone in my body tenses up when I see you,
    That what I want to say just doesn't come out,
    The words I want to say just aren't there anymore,
    I just can't get over something so easy like this.
    `You used "just" WAY too many times in one stanza. Try sticking something else in there. Get more creative!

    My feelings are all bunched together,
    All twisted around eachother and I don't know where I'm at anymore,
    It's like I'm on a merry-go-round going around and around and the never-ending ride won't stop.
    I just hate myself for liking you this much,
    Because now when I want to let go, I can't.
    `The "going around and around" is pointless to me. The name of the ride just says it all -- and simply keeping the "neverending ride won't stop" says everything. I feel like the ending could've been better. It wasn't strong enough -- like you start out emotionally strong and it sort of fizzes out.

    Keep writing, m'dear. I know that if you edit and revise, you'll be brilliant.
    ..__MiNDYY

  • 15 years ago

    by BlAcK ShAdOw

    GREAT POEM I REALLY CAN RELATE TO IT N I KNOW HOW U TRUELY FEEL N ITS NOT A GOOD ONE EITHER IM KIND OF GOING THRU THAT SAME SITUATION RITE NOW BUT N E WHO WELL DONE

  • 15 years ago

    by Goth marionette

    The poem is so touchable and I think ur choice for words was good and showed how u feel inside..Being broken is a very terrific feeling that makes u feel that u r so weak and let u reach a degree of hating urslf for doing beautiful things to somebody who doesn't deserve so..
    I loved the poem..plz keep up the good work..