THS IS HEKA GUD

This a great poem and it is really sad, but i think that u could have changed it and made some parts bettter. im not trying to be mean i swear im just trying to help. Anyways some parts u can fix by like making it more rhymy and rhythmy in some parts. like in the beginning it was all good rhythm and stuff but at the end it was like rhyming less and stuff.