Comments : Equality and Peace

  • 15 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    You should correct copy/paste errors in 'I'll' and "It's". Other than that, I really like this poem. The topic is great along with the atmosphere that you created. I admire your pieces cause of their shortness and your ability to say so much within them, and this one is not an exception. Within just two stanzas you managed to truly impressed me. Simplicity of the poem highlights emotions and message of it. I don't think that you should add more, to me this is perfect as it is.
    Keep up!

  • 15 years ago

    by Robert Anthony

    Yeah I agree with NyellMoonLight, Its perfect as is....i loved it! 6/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Sourav

    A very poignant poem. I liked the theme and the way you've written the whole poem. Yes, you can add more to it but it's also very good at this moment! Well done.

  • 15 years ago

    by Goth marionette

    It doesn't matter if the poem is short as long as it can express the whole idea..Ur poem is more than amazing bcoz it showed the shape of the world and ur wish to see the world a better place which is filled by peace..

    Great job...I enjoyed reading it
    Keep it up:)..