I loved this poem! Amazing! It seems like u tuk the emotion right out of my heart and formed it into this poem!
'Some days i wake up and tell my heart to shut up.
I tell it to stop loving you, i tell it to not to care.
I have to remind it you'll never be around you'll never be there. So as i get out of bed thoughts of you are racing through my head.'
Nicely written but I think u shud start a new line frm 'So as I get....' instead of putting a full stop and continuing the same line.
's i continue the day it starts to get Grey, missing you consumes my mind and i cant help but to think about you all the time. What have you done to me? Why am i so drawn to you.'
This one is my favourite and as I said be4 it seems like u tuk the emotion right out of my heart! I just wish u dun really feel like that'
Its as if a Mouthe to a flame, i cant stand the way I'm stuck on you in every way. Your smile makes my heart jump and my insides glow. I wonder if you would ever know how much i love you so.'
Awesome! greatly expressed and I like the way u hv used 'mouth to a flame'
'ant to be the one you need when your feeling low.
I wanna be the only one who knows just how you feel.
Please let me be here i know you need a friend.
Because i love so ill never let you go.'
Great ending i must say! Well done:)

Yea this is a great poem this poem is fr3sh o really lyked 5/5

I like how the poem starts out as you wake up and are telling your heart different things, then you go on and express a ton of feelings. Awesome poem that has to do a lot with love. 5/5.

Some days i wake up and tell my heart to shut up.
I tell it to stop loving you, i tell it to not to care.
I have to remind it you'll never be around you'll never be there. So as i get out of bed thoughts of you are racing through my head.

(Second line, somethings wrong here... "I tell it to not to care", I think it is the last "to", maybe add a comma, or erase it, idk. Great end on this one. "Thoughts of you racing through my head")

As i continue the day it starts to get Grey, missing you consumes my mind and i cant help but to think about you all the time. What have you done to me? Why am i so drawn to you.

(This was a great piece... Just that you don't know why you are drawn to him, makes it all much more deep, good job!)

Its as if a Mouthe to a flame, i cant stand the way I'm stuck on you in every way. Your smile makes my heart jump and my insides glow. I wonder if you would ever know how much i love you so.

(I don't know if it's just me, but last line? okay it's rhyming "know and so" but it might be better with something else...)

I want to be the one you need when your feeling low.
I wanna be the only one who knows just how you feel.
Please let me be here i know you need a friend.
Because i love so ill never let you go.

(deep, still... Commaes are nessesary here in these lines. "I want to be the one you need, when your feeling low" -Example-
I am not thrilled about the last line..."

"Overall: Good poem, some changes might help, (thats MY opinion, don't mind me saying that), but deep and with heart, prob the most important in a poem like this one.
I am not the best reader, especially not when it comes to something like love or friendship poems, so this might not be the best comment.

- Mark

Wonderful poem, i should thank you for writting such beautiful poem that its full of emotions

thanks

This is awesome!!...the poem is well-written and deeply expressed....
I liked it so much
Good job,plz keep it up..