Comments : No matter how hard i tried....

  • 15 years ago

    by Finalgravedigger

    Your poem made me emo, i know the situation all to well. nice poem maybe u can read one of mine.

  • 15 years ago

    by S R P

    Very good poem, though I would suggest a few things:

    "didn't" should have an apostraphe in several places.

    "forget" on the third line of the first stanza has a typo at the end.

    "go" on the fourth line of the third stanza is typo'd as well

    "through" is spelled wrong on the third line of the fourth stanza

    "hoping" is spelled wrong on the second line of the fifth stanza.

    I'd also try to use captial letters at the beginning of every line. Ultimately, it's just about structure - it makes the poem LOOK better, nothing about the read. I've heard it's a preference rather than a big deal, though.

    Overall, aside from those few mistakes, it was a great poem. When you use proper spelling, grammar and punctuation, the poem seems to flow better overall. A great poem, nonetheless!