Wow, that was really powerful. I really, really loved the story that it told. It's true, that so many people out there could still be alive if they or someone else hadn't been drinking. And to answer your post, swearing does not offend me. lol It was a wonderful read!! 5/5

Ouch
well that was a tad bit harsh
True you got your true feeling out
and about so that's good

I really like this poem
even though it is clearly not true
you expressed your thoughts so easliy
it was inspiring

Ashes to ashes
and dust to dust
A world full of sin,
Betrayal, and lust

I picked this poem because the title was fascinating me too much. *smiles*

From this poem I made a conclusion the poet is intelligent person and she is capable to think by her own brain. This is a compliment. I mean MOST of people...I would not say so. They never bother their head for a second.

Yes, this story is not real one, but it could be...maybe less dramadic one...but still.. I have always thought that alcohol has more bad than good influence for people's behaving. You can disagree with me but I have made this conclusion in during 7 years period of time. I observed my old classmates when we were 15...and since then.. Well... *shakes her head*

I think this poem was like a good warning...example care what could happen. Unresponsible behaving always leads to risk having problems...

Well done!

Wow this is sad but yet in a way beautiful message you have here. In a way reminded me of a guy who passed away because he was under the influence of alochol and he hit a tree and flew out his windsheld he died probably 10 minutes or a little while after that in the ambulance.

keep it up.
keep on writing.
love always and forever.

Oh, wow. This was amazing. I liked how it was more story-like, but it was still poetic. It's a terribly sad piece. But I loved it completely.

"Shatter.
The sound of broken glass."

^^ This was probably my favourite part of the piece, because it was so simple, yet told the reader so much.

Overall; I loved it. It was written perfectly, not a flaw to be found. 5/5

-Briana