Comments : Approaching In My Sleep

  • 11 years ago

    by Strange and Beautiful

    Well done Hun,
    Well written and good rhyming. I'm a fan of rhyming. Keep up the great work.

  • 11 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    Good job, i wouldn't say this poem had the greatest of flows, but I ended up enjoying the read and the different things that make you realize that a storm is approaching. good job 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Kaila

    Well for me it was good up until the ending. The flow was off and it kinda through me a little bit. But otherwise it had some good imagery and the rhymes weren't too bad. Maybe some more striking words though. So I'm going to give it a 4
    nice job

  • 11 years ago

    by Lonely Rider

    Well written.. I liked the title most..
    very well described.. the approach of storm.. the lightening...

    the last stanza is touching... but i hope you could change the last line... its a little off...

    overall a nice read...
    keep writing..

  • 11 years ago


    Well written

  • 11 years ago

    by WhiskeyGirl

    Good poem.
    The last stanza is nice, but a little bit off.
    Keep writing.

  • 10 years ago

    by NicoleBaby101

    That was simple and down to the point i liked! i showed emotion, very srong emotion i loved it! 5/5