Very sad indeed. beautifully written!

The one whom u r wiating will come soon isa,
Allah who created u will never forget u

Beautiful poem, very well written. 2 verse though, i think you meant to say TEDDY BEAR:) and the line after that 'my' must be replaced with 'me'

A sad, heart teraing write.

You have created great images of this poor unloved little girl. So sad!!

Well done

Michael

Well done ... sweet & heartbreaking 5/5

Very touching write...

"Who had to grow up too fast
Who learnt tears are denied
crying is waste of time
in the world
nobody cares.."

^^ so sad and so heartfet.. it reflects so much lonliness..
very innocent piece you have penned

one typo:
'my' will be me here i suppose.
'Take my in your arms'

keep writing..

Very touching indeed. One can feel the pain through your poem. Good poem!

Shame man thats a sad poem but very well written, if you were feeling sad when you wrote it I hope you feel fantastic today

Grant

I'm soo in love with you and all youre poems girl

"Pick up my teddy bear from corner"
-You need to insert the between from and corner. :)

"Who learnt tears are denied"
-Learnt? You mean learned?

"crying is waste of time"
-Insert a between is and waste..

Overall a good poem, but you missed some words.. I don't know why. Probably wrote it too fast. Slow down and put more thought into the poem. It was good but I almost felt like you could have written more. It had emotions in it and such, but I think it needs more =) 5/5

Wowthis poem was so greatly written and so touching. You have done a great job.
Keep it up

I really like this poem...as i was reading it i felt ur pain..it is really sad how there are so many people in the world that feel that way
but anyway great job i give u
5/5...:]

AWSOME POEM

Dear sister Norie... that was so touching...

Keep writing..

Best wishz...

I like it cause this poem is very "thinking", and realy deep.
I realy like this vers:

"Please come and hold me
Pick up my teddy bear from corner
Take me in your arms
and carry me back to bed to sleep"

And thanks for your comments! :)

Your poems are good...
your poems are touchy...
and this one is no exception...
you are a good writer.