Comments : His Pain

  • 11 years ago

    by Aureus Argentum

    Such is the gift... it's all right for one poem to not be completely finished as you wish it to be, for it is beautiful and expressive the way it is. And I do wish you feel better, for whatever cause it is that made you feel this way. :)
    This is a very splendid poem, albeit sad but it is still splendid in every verse, word and syllable.
    Thank you for posting! :)


  • 11 years ago

    by Ray Smallshaw

    I won't rate this poem yet as as you said it is a first copy, edit it and repost and I will keep an eye open to look for the changes, watch your tenses don't overlap or it people will get lost when reading it. Look forward to the finished product, Ray

  • 10 years ago

    by tainted melody

    Hey girl its val. I just got an account on here and I wanted to say I love this poem. Even if some people cant understand it I definetly do. One of my poems is called falling into an echo if you want to check it out.