Comments : Melodic

  • 15 years ago

    by Devon

    Aweswome poem 5/5! I like the title...
    This poem sort of shows your personality :P
    great job, keep up the amazing work!

  • 15 years ago

    by Devon

    Aweswome poem 5/5! I like the title...
    This poem sort of shows your personality :P
    great job, keep up the amazing work!

  • 15 years ago

    by Ria

    The ending is captivating!A great way to end this poem.The only thing is that I'd prefer it to be split to stanzas,because somewhere in there I lose the flow.It would point out better what you write.

    Some are really good ideas

    That hard to get is nothing more,
    Than something to achieve.

    The gifts of possession seem given to those,
    unable to see past its worth.

    So I keep it between pen and paper and I,
    And pray my heart and my mind won't be split.

    Perfect.You just make the mistake of hiding them behind a quick and massive flow.

    Thanx for your comment!Keep it up!