Okay first off the thing I noticed is your repitition of reason. I get where you were going but it seemed too much you know? You know how much I love the quote so I know where you're coming from. I liked the stanza where you were like you break up and its for a reason so on and so fort. That was repetive for me. I think the ending can be improved and I felt like it was too short...you could add soooo much to it and I know you got the potential to take it to the other level. Its up to you if you want to because its okay like this too but I see soo much more potential. Anyway I did enjoy the piece dont me more, I enjoyed it so much that I wanted more! You still deserve a *5/5* Well done :]

" "Everything happens for a reason."
Oh, how the quote expatiates in my mind.
It is what I live by each day -
my life motto; what I deem."

^^ I liked this. I feel like it gives the reader an idea as to what they'll be reading as the piece continues. It's also very well written.

"It is the truth as to why things transpire -
the way that they do.
It elucidates life in it's entirety-
whether it be for the better or the worse."

^^ This is very good. Though, I am gonna point out something very minor, and I hope it doesn't bother you -- in the first line, you put a space before the "-" after "transpire". I feel as though you should've done that in the third line, as well.

"Every heart that gets shattered -
shatters for a reason.
Every lie that is told -
is told for a reason.
Every relationship that is ended -
ends for a reason.
Every soul that dies -
dies for a reason.
Every tear that is shed -
sheds for a reason."

^^ I also liked this part. However, I feel as though the repetition of "for a reason" gets slightly tiring. Don't get me wrong; I thought this was beautiful, because of the truthfulness behind it.

"Everything in life occurs for a reason.
If there wasn't a reason for everything that happens,
Then nothing would happen the way it does."

^^ Personally, I think this should be reworded. I think it pretty much repeats everything you've said throughout the piece. I do like it, though, as a conclusion; the meaning of it. I just think it should be rephrased so as not to directly repeat everything you've already said.

Overall; I quite enjoyed it. It was real and true, and wonderfully written.

5/5

-Briana

Brilliant write.. and so very true... each line reflects the truth of life...
your poem has verbalised the beliefs that I have... yes everything happens for a reasong... and evrything thing happens for something good...
brilliant write with a deep meaning attached to it...

"Everything in life occurs for a reason.
If there wasn't a reason for everything that happens,
Then nothing would happen the way it does. "

^^so wonderfully described... excellent..

keep writing..

Hmm, right, okay. First of all, these two stanzas -

""Everything happens for a reason."
Oh, how the quote expatiates in my mind.
It is what I live by each day -
my life motto; what I deem."

&

"
It is the truth as to why things transpire -
the way that they do.
It elucidates life in it's entirety-
whether it be for the better or the worse."

...were perfect! I really enjoyed them, and I thought some of the vocab you used was beautiful.

However, that third stanza, and the overuse of "reason" began to get really annoying. It kind of felt like you were drumming the message into us, y'know? I was just sort of thinking, "Uh, we get the point." Just try not to repeat things so much. We understand what you're saying, without the need for all the repetition.

I like this piece alot. And I like the meaning behind this piece. It was very well written. And worded very beautifully. You're ideas were organized very well. But I'm not a strong believer in that quote. I use to be, but then things change. But that last stanza was almost convincing, the way you worded it was pretty, deep. [I dunno how else to describe it] lol anyway 5/5. :]

No other way of expressing that,, good job!

"Everything happens for a reason."
Oh, how the quote expatiates in my mind.
It is what I live by each day -
my life motto; what I deem.

^^The first stanza started of amazing. It captured my attention right away. Tis what everyone should live by these days.

'It is the truth as to why things transpire -
the way that they do.
It elucidates life in it's entirety-
whether it be for the better or the worse.

^^The emotion i felt in this stanza blew me away. It amazes me that somebody so young understands that everything happens for better or worse, but always ends up in a lesson.

'Every heart that gets shattered -
shatters for a reason.
Every tear that is shed -
sheds for a reason.
Every lie that is told -
is told for a reason.'

^^seriously true! i feel that everything happens for a reason, but life is our teacher. it gives the tests first the lessons afterward.

'Although life is full of plenty of hassles,
Don't frown when you stumble on them.
Look within yourself and you'll really see-
Everything truly does happen for a reason-
And rather than crying and being sad,
Find the happiness within, and smile.'

^^ the last stanza hits me in my gut. i understand this completly. For it is somethingi've recently taken to. I also agree you must find the happiness in even the most inevitable situations.

well written. I always enjoy readong your poetry.
5/5

I think everyone who commented b4 got it perfectly

Dude..
seriously i am speechless
i was just goin thru life
trying to ignore everythin that
comes up to me
but i was readin poem
specailly the learn of sayin
"
Every heart that gets shattered -
shatters for a reason.
Every tear that is shed -
sheds for a reason.
Every lie that is told -
is told for a reason"

just readin those lines gives me the reasons why i am goin wrong in my life
just keep it up the good job
and i would love to see more poems
like these once god bless
u deserve 1000/1000

much luv
-Moha...

Their comments were too much...^^
it's to long..hehe...
for me ur poem is simply nice and well written..
^^
i also believe that everything happens for a reason..bcause when many things fall down to your shoulder.. u'll be forced to believe in that saying just to feel good..

Enjoyed the entire write except for the fourth stanza, it seemed to lose the metre of the work.
I would have followed the third stanza(negative acts) with a stanza of positive ones such as smlie, hug, kiss and ended it with two lines
"Very thing happens.
FOR A REASON" .
As always an opinion.